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Post by Maka on Jul 21, 2006 23:55:59 GMT -5
Let The Pain Go
Pain's in my body like swallowing medicine heart's hollow her scars left are lessenin beauty runs through her veins, she's a doll touching my soul it stains, i'll cease the fall its been in me never leaving for 6 months through all this i kiss the pain, never get drunk can't drink problems away so why do people drink? its time we think about decisions which'll make us sink emotions splash like the waves of an ocean bursting into cursing women of explosions god, give me a moment of peace let the pain go please, i'm asking for peace, nothing to gain though"~Me _________________________________________________
Please, i'm going to be putting a lot of these in now. I have plenty of poems/raps i've made that i haven't put up so i really want opinion to see if i can improve or not. Please vote and post. I'd appreciate it. Thankyou
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Post by BAiBEEB00 on Jul 22, 2006 0:00:26 GMT -5
iSS G00D
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Post by Mabry on Jul 22, 2006 1:01:55 GMT -5
It's good. Kind of contradicting though with the drinking gig, and the asking for peace, nothing to gain thing.
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Post by Mustangs on Jul 22, 2006 1:04:58 GMT -5
ya its good, but honestly i dont know the msg your trying to show
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